The Way of Fenris Campaign

[EltonRobb]

Greetings!

In order to playtest the Lone Star book (and by extension Spirit West and New West) I started a campaign on Roll20 to run Mondays at 4:30 pm to 8:00 pm MDT/MST. Here's the blurb:

"You are a dog boy, wolfen, kankoran, or coyle on Earth at the time of Rifts. The setting is the New West of North America, and you are apart of the all canine mercenary company known as Fenris. Your job is to traverse the New West. We will be using RIFTS 30th Anniversary edition (or the 1990 edition), Lone Star, New West, and Spirit West. We will also be using Conversion Book 1 (revised).

"You may create your character using the Dog Pack R.C.C., the Wolfen, Coyle, and Kankoran races (or species). You also may choose any O.C.C. You are part of a mercenary company --- an adventurer in the New West.

"You may generate your characters by rolling 4d6 8 times - drop lowest total up the rest and arrange to taste. Adding an additional die as required. You may choose any O.C.C. or Dog Pack R.C.C. from Rifts or Lone Star. Since I'm testing Lone Star. YOU WILL NOT BE APART OF THE COALITION!"

Sounds fun. I'm taking suggestions, and I'm taking four players to form the mercenary company.

[darthauthor]

Cool!

[Library Ogre]

"You may generate your characters by rolling 4d6 8 times - drop lowest total up the rest and arrange to taste. Adding an additional die as required. You may choose any O.C.C. or Dog Pack R.C.C. from Rifts or Lone Star. Since I'm testing Lone Star. YOU WILL NOT BE APART OF THE COALITION!"

A couple notes, here, about the copy:

"You may generate your characters by rolling 4d6 8 times - drop lowest total up the rest and arrange to taste." - This is confusing to me. A comma between "lowest" and "total" would help, or moving "8 times" to after "total up the rest" would be better copy.

"rolling 4d6 8 times - drop lowest, total up the rest, and arrange to taste"
or
"rolling 4d6 8 times, drop lowest, total up the rest 8 times, and arrange to taste."

"YOU WILL NOT BE APART OF THE COALITION!" Need a space in "a part". As written, you could interpret "of" as "from" and it reads "You will not be apart [from] the Coalition." "Of" would be awkward wording there, but no more awkward than combining "a part" into "apart".

[EltonRobb]

"You may generate your characters by rolling 4d6 8 times - drop lowest total up the rest and arrange to taste. Adding an additional die as required. You may choose any O.C.C. or Dog Pack R.C.C. from Rifts or Lone Star. Since I'm testing Lone Star. YOU WILL NOT BE APART OF THE COALITION!"

A couple notes, here, about the copy:

"You may generate your characters by rolling 4d6 8 times - drop lowest total up the rest and arrange to taste." - This is confusing to me. A comma between "lowest" and "total" would help, or moving "8 times" to after "total up the rest" would be better copy.

"rolling 4d6 8 times - drop lowest, total up the rest, and arrange to taste"
or
"rolling 4d6 8 times, drop lowest, total up the rest 8 times, and arrange to taste."

"YOU WILL NOT BE APART OF THE COALITION!" Need a space in "a part". As written, you could interpret "of" as "from" and it reads "You will not be apart [from] the Coalition." "Of" would be awkward wording there, but no more awkward than combining "a part" into "apart".

Okay, does this sound better?

"You may generate your characters by rolling 4d6 8 times - drop lowest die, total up the rest, and arrange to taste. Adding an additional die as required. You may choose any O.C.C. or Dog Pack R.C.C. from Rifts or Lone Star. Since I'm testing Lone Star. YOU WILL NOT BE A PART OF THE COALITION!"

Okay, I used this: rolling 4d6 8 times, drop lowest, total up the rest 8 times, and arrange to taste.

[Library Ogre]

Yup. Works better.